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Does This Sound Good?

8/5/2018

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Good morning, Readers!
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Yesterday was weirdly productive. I cobbled together a highlight reel of one of my Assassin's Creed Origins streams and posted it.  There'll be another one today hopefully.  We'll see.  I have to catch up on all the streams.  There are twenty-four.  TWENTY-FOUR.

That achieved, I turned my mind to trying to create a blurb for Skylark.  I'm really not good at writing blurbs, but I threw something together.

I don't like it.  It needs work.  I'm stressed out of my mind about it.

So what better way to destroy my already fragile ego than to post it here and ask for criticism.  I really need help.  So, here is what I have.  I welcome any and all suggestions for improvement.
​Earth, 2404 ad.
 
Much of Canada has been annexed by an invading alien force known as the daemon.  Born into this world, in a Vancouver ghetto on the edge of daemon territory, Bennejin Skye is adopted into the United Space Corps and becomes the commander of the highly successful, if somewhat maverick, Infiltration Team 6.
 
When the outermost interstellar Way Station suddenly ceases communications with Earth, Commander Skye and Team 6 are sent to investigate.  They discover a new alien threat; the insectoid Ragnar, who move through space, consuming resources like a virus.
 
Humanity and daemon-kind must unite in the fight to protect Earth, or they will both be devoured.  However, there are those within the United Council who believe this threat is daemon, and will go to any length to rid Earth of her newest inhabitants.
 
Overpowered within the United Council, Commander Skye and Infiltration Team 6 must turn rogue to save the alliance, or Earth, and all who call it home, are doomed.
So... good?  Terrible?  Sounds interesting?  Would you read the book with this on the back?

​HELP MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

​Ahem.
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Cait G link
8/5/2018 10:47:05 am

A little tweaking? I think it's pretty good!

Earth, 2404 AD
 
Much of Canada has been annexed by an alien force known as the daemon. Raised in a Vancouver ghetto on the edge of daemon territory, Bennejin Skye is adopted into the United Space Corps and becomes the commander of the highly successful, if somewhat maverick, Infiltration Team 6.
 
When the outermost interstellar Way Station suddenly ceases communications with Earth, Commander Skye and Team 6 are sent to investigate.  They discover a new alien threat—the insectoid Ragnar, who move through space consuming resources like a virus.
 
Humanity and daemon-kind must unite in the fight to protect Earth, or they will both be devoured. However, there are those within the United Council who believe this aggressor is daemon, and this faction will go to any length to rid Earth of her newest inhabitants.
 
Overpowered within the United Council, Commander Skye and Infiltration Team 6 must turn rogue to save the alliance, or Earth and all who call it home are doomed.

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Cait G
8/5/2018 10:51:15 am

I just realized you have two OR statements that kind of say the same thing, so:

Humanity and daemon-kind realize they must unite in the fight to protect Earth. However, there are those within the United Council who believe this aggressor is daemon, and this faction will go to any length to rid Earth of her newest inhabitants.

Overpowered within the United Council, Commander Skye and Infiltration Team 6 must turn rogue to save the alliance, or Earth and all who call it home are doomed.

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S.M. Carrière link
8/5/2018 10:53:51 am

OOoooooh! That helps! Thanks so much!

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Rosa
8/5/2018 03:32:11 pm

Hi...this is a good explanation of the story...i feel you could ditch the lines about Skylarks history... maybe start stronger with an old statement, question or scathing thought by the maverick Skylark...blurbs ARE painful...stress not...youll know when you have it...

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